User blog comment:Flyingace4/Harmony Reborn/@comment-24367038-20140616004610/@comment-24367038-20140616011040

A bit better (there are a few typos/spelling errors here and there, but that's minor), but I still feel like there's something...missing...IDK, I guess I'm getting a bit subjective here...I write expositions that are waaay too long....

Still, it's a practice thing. If you just keep writing, keeping a slower pace in mind, it'll be great. Practice makes....better (there's no such thing as perfect but practice is the most important thing).

Have you read Bronycurious's FiMfics? He has a good way of slipping in little expositions here and there, where they really, REALLY flow (he's a brilliant writer all-in-all, actually). You should take some time to read "What You Mean to Me," if you haven't already. And take note of how he paces and exposes.