User blog comment:Awesomeperson110/Rainmaker CH 1/@comment-24367038-20140428220438

Love it! My only hitch is that the little paragraph at the end, that one with the exposition, is a bit rushed and awkwardly placed. I can see the stitches, if you know what I mean. If you smooth it out and make it more natural, it's be can fantastic! But this is a great story!! ^-^