Thread:Rapunzelosum/@comment-21751319-20140531011833

I need to tell you some things about Elemental...

1.     you advertise it like everyone knows about it when you hardly can sort it out in your head. We need to start keeping Elemental more of a secret, you don't want anyone stealing our ideas before it's done. I feel like an Elemental website won't be the greatest idea... unless we let the other people in our mane six to contribute to the site.

2.     You don't seem to know much about it yourself. I asked you Starnote's story and it seems like your not so sure about that. This is kinda another reason why we shouldn't advertise big for it... it needs to get more orginized if you really want to make this a thing. When I asked you about it, you couldn't tell me anything and I feel like that's a problem because I'm here to help and I like to get things done and make them REALLY good.

3.     I think your storyline wonders. What I mean by this is it doesn't seem to have a mane topic. It's about how Equestria was made, Sedella's story, Starnote's story, and blah blah blah. It sounds pretty random to me... I say we start out with how Equestria was made and then choose the antagonist, the conflict, characters, resolution, etc

remember, we need three examples of rising action in our story!

4.     Why do we need backstories of our ponies here? It's not like we can fit that all in. We need to stay on one topic. I don't understand all the other characters... what does Orion Note even have to do here? This is about the elements, isn't it? It would be great if the owners of the ocs could contribute to some of their oc's role in the story. We shouldn't have the story revolve around one pony oc in the story too much.

Ok ok I know I'm making this totally boring and horrible. You probably want to throw me out the window right now but trust me, we will get through this paragraph by paragraph with you, me and Eden! If you have a gmail you can email me (and so should Eden) so we can share a google doc togther and work on it that way. I think that's the best way to get this done :) 