User blog comment:Eclipseowl/No Place Like Home/@comment-24480187-20140605004314

I agree with Bo, but the storyline is actually quite good! I'm not a perfect writer myself, so I can't give you too much criticism.

All in all, I'd like to see what happens next :3

though my advice to you, if you make your characters have flaws, it makes the reading much more interesting.

For example, in one of my books, the main character Viola Aikawa is smart and artistic, yet she overthinks too much, can tend to be violent, she's ungraceful, and is insecure. She also cares too much, which sometimes drives her to do stupid, stupid things :P

And the antagonist in one of my books, Castor Magma, is a technology braniac, witty, and clever, though he absolutely sucks at singing. xD

Also, if you're going to pair up Gracie and Mason, what I like to do is have the other compensate for what the other doesn't have, then maybe make them have a little more in common, and have something that one likes and the other totally disagrees on. So like, say if one is forgetful. Make the other have good memory, to make up for it. But don't do it too much with them, since there's never a perfect couple... xD

So yup :3